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Great scene you’ve created there.
a little assault at batterson….hehe…nice scene adam, nice g man reference///
Those drill Sgts know their stuff – I’ve worked with a few
quite the visual! good stuff!
Yeah, that sounds about right.
Now thats the way they USED to do it!!
Drill Sgt. Haines? Hmmmmm
Excellent 55 Dustus.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Times have certainly changed. Thanks, G. Appreciate you hosting the 55 meme. Always fun.
I would never mess with Drill Sgt. Haines, Batterson or bloggerton. Tongue in cheek day, today.
Where did the knife disappear to? You’d think they wouldn’t mind busting a kid. Guess it’s one of those scapegoat schools…
Minor typo in Para5 – “Haines” becomes “Haine” in the possessive
Appreciate your visit. I’m going to tweak that. Thank you.
Excellent scene…good dialogue…always amazed what can happen in 55 ~
oooh! That was a killing 55… errr chilling one I mean!
Friday hugs xox
Hey that was really great. And in so few a lines too.
Haines……such a Barney Bad Ass
Freshman is a bad boy
I don’t know which character I am attracted to more!
that is all
Well crafted dialogue to convey the whole story…very well done in my opinion.
That’s Batterson giving him the boot!
I’m in awe of a soldier’s disciplined mind. Freshman never woulda made it.
I think I like Freshman! Neat 55!
Sometimes a punch is all someone needs! :D
Hi Adam, love this snippet, and would love to hear more. Where did he go? What did he do? Nice to have a chance to read your work. Been busy with the crazy 30 in 30 and my work schedule.
Effective scene that hints at considerably more. =)
What a realistic 55–sad but true to life. Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2011/04/28/horse/
YOu say so much in your 55. NIce job Dustus :)
Great scene….can see it.
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