Across Coney Island

*The following poem is offered in response to the One Stop Poetry Sunday Picture Prompt Challenge. This wonderful prompt was shot by photographer Danielle Kelly. She is featured today on One Shoot Photography Sunday. Come check out her excellent photography!

Trailing veil like windswept sail
Walking over boardwalk planks
Holding up Bridezilla’s tail

Not seeing what’s behind them
As if her maid couldn’t keep more silent
Turns aside with sigh
Second undefined, then
We don’t know
If she’s smiling or crying
Still helping a friend
Across Coney Island


34 Responses to “Across Coney Island”

  1. Love that photo and the poem you wrote with it…kudos on this one my friend.

  2. betweenhearts75 Says:

    Wow, fantastic photo that looks really old fashioned & modern too with the background hustle. Fantastic poetry and yes with her face being hidden that unsurity of if she is smiling or crying. Love the mention of “Bridezilla” in flipping through stations I’ve seen that show mentioned/always shake my head and walk away. (However its gotten worse…yep women wanting extreme make-overs, liposuction, tummy tucks, rhinoplasty…eghh dear, lol) Not sure what the world is coming to!
    ~ Well anyway your words cast beauty, question, and that blend of reality not so perfect, and I find that in itself a rewarding read!
    ~Wonderful photography to Danielle Kelly.🙂

  3. This may just be my favorite so far🙂

  4. Appreciate the visit, Charles, April, & Diana. Haappy New Year! April, I hear you. That show’s a bit over-the-top. lol As for the post, credit to Danielle Kelly. I think her photo is abosolutely amazing!

  5. What a wonderful poem today. I liked the reference to Bridezilla, I had to chuckle when I read that.

  6. Love how you have described two realities co-existing! Interesting questions about her reality!

  7. I like the question in thoughts your poem takes to

  8. I am glad you incorporated the hidden face into your piece. I didn’t even touch that…smiling or crying…good mystery end.

  9. Very nice take on the pic, dustus. You give it a wry, contemporary and very human flair. Thanks for the Happy New Year wish, and the same to you, my friend.

  10. This is a really innovative take on the prompt, until I saw your words I had read all the other takes and hadn’t even seen the other person that could be at the end of that taffeta trail! Intriguing write, I love snapshot poems that leave you wanting to know more about the characters =)

  11. Interesting. You didn’t go for the bride angle, but for the woman behind the bride, the bridesmaid, and used it to produce a whole new angle on a sense of loneliness…potential joy, or sorrow, depending on how we look at it. It is not her day, but she is there to help a friend, and there, there she stands and wonders…looks out on the beach and ponders what could be, what is, what will never be…just a second, and nothing more.

    Striking work Dustus!

  12. yeah – we don’t know if she’s smiling or crying – i like this line because it makes me think beyond the veil and beyond the pic..

    • When looking at the photo I kept trying to see a face behind the veil. Then gave up b/c I couldn’t tell. lol

  13. “Holding up Bridezilla’s tail”

    I am loving that!

  14. I love this photo it’s got a delicacy to it, as if she’s looking for / longing for something but can’t quite find it. As always Adam you’ve done a fine job. Is she crying or giggling? We’ll never know!

    Shan

  15. Super– this affected me in similar ways…xxxj

  16. Excellent, Adam. I like the unexpected use of the word Bridezilla.

    We see the person in the picture in a completely different way.

  17. signed .............bkm Says:

    Wonderful choice of words “Bridezilla” the best that gives the prompt a totally new life…and the helping a friend…is that not what life is all about…best to you Adam..bkm

  18. Bridezilla’s tail – I love that!

  19. Very nice, I did like the shift of focus from the core picture to someone outside the scope of thought. Makes it closer to home. Wonderful job on this one!

  20. Great image to image and then through and beyond the veil and the oddities. Liked it a lot Adam. Gay @beachanny

  21. I love how you keep up the mystery in the picture with yur poem, Adam! A “second undefined/then we don’t know” the expression on her face or if “she’s still helping a friend”! A “Bridezilla”, indeed! Thanks.

  22. bridezilla…loved it…great one shoot…cheers pete

  23. Yours are words to …
    to fly in to emotion
    simple, apparently, thoughts
    meandearing
    I like to go through

  24. It’s true – we don’t know if she’s smiling or crying. Great poem, Adam.

  25. Nice take on the picture…I couldn’t help but chuckle at your usage of bridezillaand liked the aura of mystery.

  26. I wish i could words to this pic as brillaintly as you did ! fantastic🙂

  27. Excellent, but your poetry always is.

  28. Loved the poem and the photograph. I liked the line..not seeing what’s behind them.

  29. Good descriptions. Graceful.

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